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Greeting as a new president of HYT sales

이진태/2024-04-11

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Date : 11, April, 2024 To : Clients Cc : Mr. Kim Subject : Greeting as a new president of HYT sales Hello, I'm JinTae Lee, new president of HYT sales. I worked at a Apple and Benz as a supervisor of sales. I’ll do my best and thank you for your cooperation in advance. JT LEE, president of HYT Sales Division.
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Hi JT! You did a good job with this email. Keep it up!
~~Teacher Ryka^^


Date : 11, April, 2024
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To : Clients
>> CORRECT

Cc : Mr. Kim
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Subject : Greeting as a new president of HYT sales
>> Subject: Introduction as the New President of HYT Sales

Hello, I'm JinTae Lee, new president of HYT sales.
>> I am JinTae Lee, the new president of HYT Sales. 

I worked at a Apple and Benz as a supervisor of sales.
>> I bring with me a wealth of experience, having previously served as a sales supervisor at Apple and Benz. 

I’ll do my best and thank you for your cooperation in advance.
>> I am committed to bringing my best to this role and am grateful for your cooperation and support in advance.

JT LEE, president of HYT Sales Division.
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