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Mission statement of HYT salses

이진태/2024-04-11

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Date : 11, April, 2024 To : All members of Sales Division Cc : Mr. Kim Subject : Mission statement of HYT salses Hello, I'm JinTae Lee, new president of HYT sales. I’m giving you our mission statement for this month. This month sales goal is to exceed $1M. It’s not hard mission, although this month is not peak season. Although, last year same month, we achieved $0.9M sales, but now we have more clients than last year. thank you for your cooperation in advance. JT LEE, president of HYT Sales Division.
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Hey JT! Great job on this sample email you made. Keep it up!
~~Teacher Ryka ^^


Date : 11, April, 2024
>>CORRECT

To : All members of Sales Division
>>To: All members of the Sales Division


Cc : Mr. Kim
>>CORRECT


Subject : Mission statement of HYT salses
>>Subject: Mission Statement of HYT Sales


Hello, I'm JinTae Lee, new president of HYT sales.
>> Dear Team,
I am JinTae Lee, the new president of HYT Sales.


I’m giving you our mission statement for this month.
>> I am excited to share our mission statement for this month with you. 


This month sales goal is to exceed $1M.
>> Our sales goal for this month is to exceed $1 million. 


It’s not hard mission, although this month is not peak season.
>> While this may seem like a challenging mission, especially considering it's not the peak season, I believe it is achievable. 


Although, last year same month, we achieved $0.9M sales, but now we have more clients than last year.
>> Compared to the same month last year when we achieved $0.9 million in sales, we now have a larger client base, which gives us a strong foundation to reach and exceed our target.


thank you for your cooperation in advance.
>> Thank you in advance for your cooperation and dedication to making this mission a success.


JT LEE, president of HYT Sales Division.
>> Best regards,
JT Lee
President, HYT Sales Division

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