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Do you believe it's better to pursue passion-driven career success or prioritize a balanced work-li

이진태/2024-04-05

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Successful career and work-life balance, both are important. The best option is balance of both. However if I choose only one thing, I would choose career success. I'm still young, so I would choose success. Because peaceful life can enjoy after a retirement.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hey JT! Work-life balance is indeed very important for everyone and for some people they don't get to have the choice to choose but I'm glad you were able to share your opinion on this.
~~Teacher Ryka^^


Successful career and work-life balance, both are important.
>> Both a successful career and work-life balance are important.

The best option is balance of both.
>>The best option is a balance of both. 

However if I choose only one thing, I would choose career success.
>>However, if I had to choose only one, I would choose career success.

I'm still young, so I would choose success. Because peaceful life can enjoy after a retirement.
>>I'm still young, so I prioritize success now, knowing that a peaceful life can be enjoyed after retirement.
  
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