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Youth is a state of mind!

김창민/2024-03-28

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I agree that youth is a state of mind. The young can be behind the times, and the elder can be go with the times. I watched a youtube video. The topic of this video was meeting between teacher and student. This teacher worked about 20 years in school, and this student dropped out of school herself. She said that she got stressed extremely at school because of studying hard, so she left school and found her career in the society. Before I watched this video, I was worried that the teacher would scold the student. But in this video, this teacher respected her choice and he said that he would found the solutions about happiness of his students. After that, I watched another youtube video that meeting with student who would took a CSAT and the founder of CSAT. In this video, the founder insisted that the current CSAT has changed a lot from founding intentions, so government have to make a solutions that students don't have to focus only on studying.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Wow! Well done, Min! ^^ Thank you for sharing the details of the videos you've watched. Evidently, youth is a state of mind.

-Khai

I agree that youth is a state of mind.

>> CORRECT

The young can be behind the times, and the elder can be go with the times.

>> The young can be behind the times, and the elderly can go with the times.

I watched a youtube video.

>> I watched a YouTube video.

The topic of this video was meeting between teacher and student.

>> The topic of this video was a meeting between a teacher and a student.

This teacher worked about 20 years in school, and this student dropped out of school herself.

>> CORRECT

She said that she got stressed extremely at school because of studying hard, so she left school and found her career in the society.

>> She said she got extremely stressed at school because of studying hard, so she left school and found her career in society.

Before I watched this video, I was worried that the teacher would scold the student.

>> CORRECT

But in this video, this teacher respected her choice and he said that he would found the solutions about happiness of his students.

>> But in this video, this teacher respected her choice, and he said that he would find solutions for the happiness of his students.

After that, I watched another youtube video that meeting with student who would took a CSAT and the founder of CSAT.

>> After that, I watched another YouTube video that shows a meeting between a student who took CSAT and the founder of CSAT.

In this video, the founder insisted that the current CSAT has changed a lot from founding intentions, so government have to make a solutions that students don't have to focus only on studying.

>> In this video, the founder insisted that the current CSAT has changed a lot from its founding intentions, so the government should make solutions in order for the students to not only focus on studying.