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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the advantages and disadvantages of purchasing something online?

These days, always of my purchases something from online shopping malls.
The reason is that online malls has more advantages than disadvantages.
I think the advantages of online malls are cheap price and delivery time.
The online malls products the price are definitely cheaper than offline stores.
And in this case of delivery time, if I have lucky, sometimes I did my order in this morning and I can receive in the afternoon.
I think the reason why we can receive the my orders quickly that because South Korea has a small land.
But, it's has also disadvantage.
I can't check until I receive the goods.
For example, if I buy the clothes online, sometimes fail to size of clothes.
Also, sometimes different that there are colors, patterns, and quality.
In these case, I feel wasting the time to spent online and delivery fee it's need for the refund and return.

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Hi, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the advantages and disadvantages of purchasing something online?


These days, always of my purchases something from online shopping malls.
>> These days, all of my purchases are from online shopping malls.
The reason is that online malls has more advantages than disadvantages.
>> The reason is that online malls have more advantages than disadvantages.
I think the advantages of online malls are cheap price and delivery time.
>> I think the advantages of online malls are the cheap prices and fast deliveries.
The online malls products the price are definitely cheaper than offline stores.
>> The prices of products from online stores are definitely cheaper than the physical stores.
And in this case of delivery time, if I have lucky, sometimes I did my order in this morning and I can receive in the afternoon.
>> And in the case of delivery time, if I am lucky, sometimes when I put my order in the morning, I can receive it in the afternoon.
I think the reason why we can receive the my orders quickly that because South Korea has a small land.
>> I think the reason why I can receive my orders quickly is because South Korea has a small land area.
But, it's has also disadvantage.
>> But, it's has also disadvantages.
I can't check until I receive the goods.
>> CORRECT!
For example, if I buy the clothes online, sometimes fail to size of clothes.
>> For example, if I buy the clothes online, sometimes fail to see the size of the clothes.
Also, sometimes different that there are colors, patterns, and quality.
>> Also, sometimes the colors, patterns, and quality are different.
In these case, I feel wasting the time to spent online and delivery fee it's need for the refund and return.
>> In this case, I feel like I'm wasting time to spend money for the online and delivery fee needed for the refund and exchange of the items.
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