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It is impossible to overcome wars even we have UN in the world for keeping our peace.

Every countries persue their own interests and benefit first even they deprive of something of other country.

We can't remove in the world because dictators are increasing more and more unfortunately like Putine, Xijinping and Hamas and so on.

We should look out destorted and blind faithfu belief toward religion.

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Thank you for your homework, Lily!

Keep going and never give up!

-Hanna ^^

It is impossible to overcome wars even we have UN in the world for keeping our peace.

>>It is impossible to overcome wars even though we have the UN in the world to keep our peace.
Every countries persue their own interests and benefit first even they deprive of something of other country.

>>Every country pursues its own interests and benefits first, even if it means depriving another country of something. 
We can't remove in the world because dictators are increasing more and more unfortunately like Putine, Xijinping and Hamas and so on.

>>We can't eradicate this issue in the world because dictators are increasing more and more, unfortunately, like Putin, Xi Jinping, Hamas, and so on.
We should look out destorted and blind faithfu belief toward religion.

>>We should be wary of distorted and blind faith in religion.


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