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The government should try to protect people's safety and life.

If someone seriously threat good people, the government have to punish the criminals.

If the criminals are first degree murders, they are disqualified to live together in this society.

Although the execution system is very cruel, it is sometimes necessary for the peace and safety for everyone.

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Good day, Ms. Lily!
I agree that the government imposed cruel punishment for criminals who committed heinous crimes. Personally, the firing squad is too barbaric and cruel for me, but I am into the death penalty in a peaceful and quiet way.
Talk to you later!
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The government should try to protect people's safety and life.
>>>  CORRECT!

If someone seriously threat good people, the government have to punish the criminals.
>>>  If someone seriously threatens good people, the government has to punish the criminals.

If the criminals are first degree murders, they are disqualified to live together in this society.
>>> If the criminals are first-degree murderers, they are disqualified to live together in this society.

Although the execution system is very cruel, it is sometimes necessary for the peace and safety for everyone.
>>> Although the execution system is very cruel, it is sometimes necessary for the peace and safety of everyone.
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