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I think people's eating habit affect their lifespan. Some people eat unhealthy food. For example, there are marshmallows, candies, chocolate, and snacks. Those food make us unhealthy. If we eat thosefood, we can get diseases such as diabetes. So, we should eat healthy food as much as possible

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Hello, Seon U!
Thank you for always doing your homework! I completely agree with you; our eating habits have an impact on our lives. There's a saying: 'We are what we eat'.  What we eat reveals how we care for ourselves.
Anyway, you did an amazing job today. See you tomorrow~  
-T.Jhozel ^^

I think people's eating habit affect their lifespan.
>> Correct!
>> OR: 
I believe that a person's diet has an impact on their lifespan.
Some people eat unhealthy food. For example, there are marshmallows, candies, chocolate, and snacks. 
>> Some people consume unhealthy foods, such as marshmallows, candies, chocolate, and snacks.
Those food make us unhealthy. If we eat thosefood, we can get diseases such as diabetes. 
>> These foods make us unhealthy. If we consume those foods, we may develop diseases such as diabetes.
So, we should eat healthy food as much as possible 
>> Correct!
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