¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

What do you think is the difference between a picnic and camping?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: Àü*ä
2022-10-20 3167

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Picnic and camping is obiously different.
Picnic is lighter than camping. We can have a picnic on the park or front of river. We usually have some lunch at the park.
But Camping might be need to the location.
We can not camping anywhere it may be illegal.
Because we have to sleep on the tent.
It is big diffrence.
We need to bring the tent and sleeping bag and some dishes to make meals.
When we go to the camping we usually eat some meat so we have to prepare carefully than picnic.
And we have to spend the night so we need the freshlight and fire.
In front of fire, we can talk about the serious stories each other.
Camping mood is deeper and we can prudent.
But I like light picnic. It it because I want to sleep at home and I don't like insect.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello Eun Chae!
Keep on sharing your ideas with the topics given to you.  Memorize the verb phrases as you have noticed in your corrections.  Learn from your mistakes and improve for the better. ^^


~T. Maine


Picnic and camping is obiously different.
>> Picnics and camping are obviously different. 
Picnic is lighter than camping. 
>> Correct. 
We can have a picnic on the park or front of river.
>>We can have a picnic at the park or in front of the river. 
 We usually have some lunch at the park.
>> Correct. 
But Camping might be need to the location.
>> But camping needs to have a specific location. 
We can not camping anywhere it may be illegal.
>> We cannot go camping anywhere because it might be illegal.
Because we have to sleep on the tent.
>> It is because we have to sleep in a tent. 
It is big diffrence.
>> It is a big difference. 
We need to bring the tent and sleeping bag and some dishes to make meals.
>>We need to bring a tent, sleeping bags, and some dishes to make meals too. 
When we go to the camping we usually eat some meat so we have to prepare carefully than picnic.
>> When we go camping, we usually eat some meat, so we have to prepare carefully than picnic. 
And we have to spend the night so we need the freshlight and fire.
>>  And we have to spend the night so we need a flashlight and some fire. 
In front of fire, we can talk about the serious stories each other.
>> In front of the fire, we can talk about serious stories with each other. 
Camping mood is deeper and we can prudent.
>> The camping mood is deeper and we can prudent. 
But I like light picnic.
>> But I like a light picnic. 
 It it because I want to sleep at home and I don't like insect.
>> It is because I want to sleep at home and I don't like insects. 

¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
125729 Improving my English skills ±Ç*ÀÏ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-17 5
125728 15.Feb.2023 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-17 1
125727 What do you want to eat this weekend? ÀÓ*È£ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-17 0
125726 One of my bucket lists ¾ç*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-17 793
125725 Homework ¿À*ºó ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 1
125724 homework 02.16 ÃÖ*Ç ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 605
125723 Is it okay for middle schoolers to have jobs like babysitting or... ±¸*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 603
125722 2023-2/16 HOMEWORK ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 613
125721 Why are people so scared of death? ±¸*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 791
125720 ¿µÀÛ ¼÷Á¦ ÀÌ*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 0
125719 Which one do you think is better, being rich or being beautiful?... ±¸*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 586
125718 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 594
125717 Is there anything that annoys you about living in your country? ±è*¼º ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 0
125716 Homework ±è*ȯ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 855
125715 What are the pros and cons of being a celebrity? ±è*¼º ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 1
125714 How important are first impressions to you? ±è*¼º ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 1
125713 What kind of person do you think is the Yale professor who... ±è*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 2
125712 homework ¹Ú*°æ ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 645
125711 homework ¼Õ*±Ù ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 808
125710 homework ½Å*Çö ¿Ï·á 2023-02-16 0

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04