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What do you think is the difference between a picnic and camping?

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Picnic and camping is obiously different.
Picnic is lighter than camping. We can have a picnic on the park or front of river. We usually have some lunch at the park.
But Camping might be need to the location.
We can not camping anywhere it may be illegal.
Because we have to sleep on the tent.
It is big diffrence.
We need to bring the tent and sleeping bag and some dishes to make meals.
When we go to the camping we usually eat some meat so we have to prepare carefully than picnic.
And we have to spend the night so we need the freshlight and fire.
In front of fire, we can talk about the serious stories each other.
Camping mood is deeper and we can prudent.
But I like light picnic. It it because I want to sleep at home and I don't like insect.

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Hello Eun Chae!
Keep on sharing your ideas with the topics given to you.  Memorize the verb phrases as you have noticed in your corrections.  Learn from your mistakes and improve for the better. ^^


~T. Maine


Picnic and camping is obiously different.
>> Picnics and camping are obviously different. 
Picnic is lighter than camping. 
>> Correct. 
We can have a picnic on the park or front of river.
>>We can have a picnic at the park or in front of the river. 
 We usually have some lunch at the park.
>> Correct. 
But Camping might be need to the location.
>> But camping needs to have a specific location. 
We can not camping anywhere it may be illegal.
>> We cannot go camping anywhere because it might be illegal.
Because we have to sleep on the tent.
>> It is because we have to sleep in a tent. 
It is big diffrence.
>> It is a big difference. 
We need to bring the tent and sleeping bag and some dishes to make meals.
>>We need to bring a tent, sleeping bags, and some dishes to make meals too. 
When we go to the camping we usually eat some meat so we have to prepare carefully than picnic.
>> When we go camping, we usually eat some meat, so we have to prepare carefully than picnic. 
And we have to spend the night so we need the freshlight and fire.
>>  And we have to spend the night so we need a flashlight and some fire. 
In front of fire, we can talk about the serious stories each other.
>> In front of the fire, we can talk about serious stories with each other. 
Camping mood is deeper and we can prudent.
>> The camping mood is deeper and we can prudent. 
But I like light picnic.
>> But I like a light picnic. 
 It it because I want to sleep at home and I don't like insect.
>> It is because I want to sleep at home and I don't like insects. 

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