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The worst news which I heard in Korea is baseball news. It was about my favorite player will leave my favorite team. I was realy sad when I heard the news because I am not able to watch my favorit player¡¯s play in my favorite baseball team since next year.

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Hi Alex:)

That sounds awful. :( I'm sorry to hear that. 

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The worst news which I heard in Korea is baseball news. 
>> The worst news that I have heard is the one about baseball. 

It was about my favorite player will leave my favorite team. 
>> It is about my favorite player leaving my favorite team. 

I was realy sad when I heard the news because I am not able to watch my favorit player¡¯s play in my favorite baseball team since next year
>> I was really sad when I heard the news because I will not be able to watch my favorite player play starting next year. 

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