¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽŠ³»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

Hi

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: Ȳ*±¸
2022-02-09 522

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Hellow! Andrea. It is always fun and exciting. I know that you can't believe that though. I just listened the record file. I was surprised that I sound so tired. I don't like people who has low confidence and voice but now that is me!! I should try to be more energitic from next class so you will not be down either.

My parents adopted a dog! She's name is bead in Korean. She is 3 years old. Actually I' ve tried of having dogs when I was young. It was really hard. So now I think I can feed some fishes..I've also tried of them It's much easier than feeding dogs. I love fishes as much as zombies. When I go to an lake. I can stay there all day looking fishes swiming freely. They make me relax. So If I have to take only one I would choose fishes!

You said you had surgery.
I could fianally get it during record file..
I hope you get much better soon and you will be! I believe your power. I knew it. Actually last class you said you like cheese burger. It sounds somewhat sad.. just kidding :)

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hi Q!^^ 

I never really had a pet. 
I am scared with animals that have furs.
Dogs, cats, hamsters, and guinea pigs are examples of it. 
I don't want their fur to touch my skin. haha
However, my niece has a pet fish. When they transferred to another house, her fishes syated in our house. 
Now, I am the one looking after the fishes. 

Betta fish are cool. You should check them. 
Regarding my surgery, it happened last July. So I am okay now. 
It was actually my gallbladder. It has been removed. 

Teacher Andrea

Hellow! Andrea.
>> Hello, Andrea! 

It is always fun and exciting. 
>> I am a person who is always having fun and excited.  

I know that you can't believe that though. 
>> Correct 

I just listened the record file. I was surprised that I sound so tired. 
>> I just listened to the recorded file and I was surprised that I sounded tired. 

I don't like people who has low confidence and voice but now that is me!! 
>> I don't like people who have low self-confidence and soft voice, turns out that it is me!! 

I should try to be more energitic from next class so you will not be down either.
>> I should try to be more energetic starting on our next class so you will not be down either. 

My parents adopted a dog! 
>> Correct 

She's name is bead in Korean. 
>> Her Korean name is Bead

She is 3 years old.
>> Correct 

Actually I' ve tried of having dogs when I was young. 
>> Correct 

It was really hard. 
>> Correct 

So now I think I can feed some fishes..
>> So I thought I can feed some fish. 

I've also tried of them It's much easier than feeding dogs. 
>> I also tried having fish and it's much easier than having dogs. 

I love fishes as much as zombies. 
>> Correct (hahaha) 

When I go to an lake. I can stay there all day looking fishes swiming freely. 
>> When I go to a lake, I can stay there all day just by looking at fishes swimming freely. 

They make me relax. So If I have to take only one I would choose fishes!
>> They make me feel relaxed and if I could choose a pet, I would choose to have a fish.
 

You said you had surgery.
>> Correct 

I could fianally get it during record file..
>>I was able to get it through the recorded file

I hope you get much better soon and you will be!
>> Correct 

I believe your power. 
>> Correct 
>> OR: I believe you are strong. 

I knew it. 
>> Correct 

Actually last class you said you like cheese burger. 
>> Correct 

It sounds somewhat sad.. just kidding :) .
>> Correct (hahahaha) 
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
116299 Writing Task (Feb 9th, 2022) ³²*½Â ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 421
116298 2/10 homework ÀÌ*À¯ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 292
116297 Homework ¼Õ*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 361
116296 Do you forgive people easily when they did something bad to you?... Ȳ*º° ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 228
116295 homework(1) Àå*¼ö ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 175
116294 homework ÀÌ*ºó ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 0
116293 Homework ±è*À± ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 798
116292 Homework ±â*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 493
116291 Affect of newspaper ÀÌ*ÇÏ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 435
116290 Homework ÇÏ*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 398
116289 WRITING ±è*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 317
116288 WRITING ±è*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 1
116287 WRITING ±è*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 0
116286 Writing ±è*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 0
116285 Homework ±â*Çö ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 155
116284 Homework ¿À*Àº ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 286
116283 The Plant-based meat ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 2
116282 Homework ±Ç*¹Ì ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 1
116281 What is the worst news you\'ve ever heard in South Korea?... ·ù*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 547
116280 homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2022-02-10 860

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ Ķ¸°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öÆ° Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽŠ±ÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î ÇÏ°í ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04