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Talk about the most recent article or news that you have read or seen.

김일환/2025-06-12

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When I see about 'HBM' news. I try to read the article. "HBM" stands for "High Bandwidth Memory." Because, My company has a lot of connection with 'HBM'. When I was in 30. The world best D-RAM company was SAMSUNG. But, not now. Manufacturing big mount of D-RAM isn't big issue. Now is HBM. The world best HBM company is Hynix. It is also Korean company. But, We haven't been in business with Hynix. I am looking forward a news, "Samsung reclaims the top spot in the HBM market."

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Good evening, Hwanny!

Staying up to date on current events is crucial because it allows you to make educated decisions, engage in meaningful conversations, and comprehend your surroundings. It also allows you to keep informed about local and global events and make sound decisions regarding your own activities.

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When I see about 'HBM' news. I try to read the article.

>>> The most recent article I read was about "HBM."

"HBM" stands for "High Bandwidth Memory."

>>> CORRECT

Because, My company has a lot of connection with 'HBM'.

>>> It's because my company has a lot of connections with "HBM."

When I was in 30. The world best D-RAM company was SAMSUNG.

>>> When I was 30, the world's best D-RAM company was SAMSUNG.

But, not now. Manufacturing big mount of D-RAM isn't big issue. Now is HBM.

>>> But not anymore because manufacturing a big amount of D-RAM isn't a big issue. Now it is HBM.

The world best HBM company is Hynix. It is also Korean company.

>>> The world's best HBM company is Hynix. It is also a Korean company.

But, We haven't been in business with Hynix. I am looking forward a news, "Samsung reclaims the top spot in the HBM market."

>>> But we haven't done business with Hynix. I'm looking forward to the news, "Samsung reclaims the top spot in the HBM market."
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