I think that this is equal with in a family.
If we can understand each other and considerate the other one,
If we admit that we are different person,
I think we don't have any fights, and it won't be exist to create wars in the world.
But they are always trying to give some proof which is right to each other.
Also they are wanting to win all aspects.
However we can live well when we can collaborate with others.
We have to remember that we cannot live alone.
Hello Elly.
There was party in my town, yesterday.
So It had an machine to pick up some items if we put in a coin.
My son is really like this machine but I usually permit to try only under 5000 won.
However he didn't need to control from mom, because I wasn't here.
He called and informed me that spent all his money to pick it up in the machine.
But I couldn't yell him because he was happy.
I feel like too long a day, but It's too short a week.
It is coming closely this Friday.
See you in this class.
Thank you.
Hi Stella,
Once again, thank you for taking the time to respond to this essay. :)
I really appreciate your perspective, its thoughtful and meaningful. I truly hope there will be no more wars anywhere in the world. Instead, we should all focus on love and peace. If we do, I believe our world can become beautiful again.
Thats awesome! I enjoy playing claw machines too! I'm glad to hear your son had a great time at the party yesterday.
Hang in there! Just one more day to go! You've got this! :)
- Teacher Elly~
I think that this is equal with in a family.
>> I think this is the same as in a family.
If we can understand each other and considerate the other one, If we admit that we are different person, I think we don't have any fights, and it won't be exist to create wars in the world.
>> If we can understand each other and be considerate of one another, and if we admit that we are different people, I think we wouldn't fight, and wars wouldn't exist in the world.
But they are always trying to give some proof which is right to each other.
>> But they are always trying to prove that they are right to each other.
Also they are wanting to win all aspects.
>> They also want to win in every aspect.
However we can live well when we can collaborate with others.
>> However, we can live well when we collaborate with others.
We have to remember that we cannot live alone.
>> CORRECT
Hello Elly.
>> Hello, Elly.
There was party in my town, yesterday.
>> There was a party in my town yesterday.
So It had an machine to pick up some items if we put in a coin.
>> There was a machine where you could pick up items by inserting a coin.
My son is really like this machine but I usually permit to try only under 5000 won.
>> My son really likes this kind of machine, but I usually only permit him to spend up to 5,000 won.
OR >> My son really likes this kind of machine, but I usually only allow him to spend up to 5,000 won.
However he didn't need to control from mom, because I wasn't here.
>> However, he didnt need to be controlled by me, because I wasnt there.
He called and informed me that spent all his money to pick it up in the machine.
>> He called and told me that he spent all his money trying to get something from the machine.
OR >> He called and informed me that he spent all his money trying to get something from the machine.
But I couldn't yell him because he was happy.
>> But I couldnt scold him because he was happy.
I feel like too long a day, but It's too short a week.
>> The days feel too long, but the week feels too short.
It is coming closely this Friday.
>> Friday is coming soon.
See you in this class.
>> See you in class.
OR >> See you later in our class.
Thank you.
>> CORRECT