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What are the advantages of using door passwords instead of traditional keys?

이승훈/2025-06-03

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
door password use is very convenient. fisrt, we don't need have traditional keys. only we need have a fingers. second, we don't lost traditional keys. because door password is need a finger only. second, we can reduce our loads. although traditional keys are light weight, but those are bothering. but door password is need a battery. so we have to changing new battery about every 7? years.
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Hi, Hun!
You are absolutely correct! Carrying traditional keys is bothersome, and sometimes it's really difficult to find where we placed them. Also, before leaving the house, I usually have to check my keys several times just to make sure I have them with me because I cannot enter if I leave them inside. So yes! Door passwords are indeed much better and more convenient!
- T. Caitlyn 
door password use is very convenient.
>> Using a door password is very convenient.
fisrt, we don't need have traditional keys.
>> First, we don't need to have traditional keys.
only we need have a fingers. 
>> We only need our fingers.
second, we don't lost traditional keys. because door password is need a finger only.
>> Second, we don't lose traditional keys because a door password only requires a finger.
second, we can reduce our loads.
>> Third, we can lighten our load.
although traditional keys are light weight, but those are bothering.
>> Although traditional keys are lightweight, they can be bothersome.
but door password is need a battery.
>> However, a door password requires a battery.
so we have to changing new battery about every 7? years.
>> So we have to change the battery approximately every seven years.
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