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what do you like most about June?

김영경/2025-06-03

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What I like most about June is that both my younger brother and I were born in this month — on the 9th and 25th, to be exact. We always celebrate each other’s birthdays with small gifts. You might have guessed it already, but we're not even a year apart. My mother became pregnant with my brother just a few months after giving birth to me. I’ve heard that during the delivery, she suffered from severe bleeding and almost lost her life. While that’s a sad part of the story, thankfully, we are all healthy and happy now. So, for our family, June is a month filled with gratitude. I have another reason to make me excited about June because I often have summer holidays or I have just some days before summer holidays in July. During the summer holidays, I’ve traveled to many areas domestically and abroad with my family members. I am already excited about what adventures awaits us this summer vacations since we had various unexpected adventures every summer travel.

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Hello, Steve! ^-^)

June is named after the Roman goddess Juno, Jupiter's wife. It is generally known as "wedding month" in various cultures. This practice is tied to the Roman goddess Juno, who represents marriage and childbirth. Many couples select June for their nuptials because of the pleasant weather, plenty of fresh flowers, and general romantic atmosphere of the month.

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Have a good night!^^

__T. Mayleen :)

What I like most about June is that both my younger brother and I were born in this month — on the 9th and 25th, to be exact.

>>> What I like most about June is that both my younger brother and I were born in this month, on the 9th and 25th, to be exact.

We always celebrate each other’s birthdays with small gifts. You might have guessed it already, but we're not even a year apart.

>>> CORRECT

>>> OR: We always celebrate each other's birthdays with tiny gifts. You may have guessed it, but we aren't even a year apart.

My mother became pregnant with my brother just a few months after giving birth to me.

>>> CORRECT

I’ve heard that during the delivery, she suffered from severe bleeding and almost lost her life. While that’s a sad part of the story, thankfully, we are all healthy and happy now. So, for our family, June is a month filled with gratitude.

>>> CORRECT

>>> OR: I've heard that she experienced serious bleeding during the delivery and nearly died. While this is a tragic story, we are now all well and happy. So, for our family, June is a month of appreciation.

I have another reason to make me excited about June because I often have summer holidays or I have just some days before summer holidays in July.

>>> I have another reason to be excited about June because I often have summer holidays off, or I have just some days before summer holidays in July.

During the summer holidays, I’ve traveled to many areas domestically and abroad with my family members. I am already excited about what adventures awaits us this summer vacations since we had various unexpected adventures every summer travel.

>>> In the summer holidays, I travel to many areas domestically and abroad with my family members. I am already excited about what adventures await us this summer vacation since we had various unexpected adventures every summer travel.
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