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김균일/2025-06-06

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Here's for your homework: [ESSAY] In 3~5 sentences, answer the question below: >> Have you ever used alcohol to help you overcome fear? I used alcohol to reconcile with my father. As every family have a little bit problem, and also we have. When I matriculate at a university, we drinks alcohol with previous history. In my case, that feeling was not about fear but I needed courage and alcohol helped to talk about it.

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Here's your corrected essay, David. Please go over the revisions given below. See you later!

Cheers,

Jean~~

Have you ever used alcohol to help you overcome fear?

I used alcohol to reconcile with my father. As every family have a little bit problem, and also we have.

>>> Alcohol helped me reconcile with my father. Like all families, we have our share of issues.

When I matriculate at a university, we drinks alcohol with previous history. In my case, that feeling was not about fear but I needed courage and alcohol helped to talk about it.

>>> When I started university, drinking alcohol was a tradition. For me, it wasn’t about fear - I just needed courage, and alcohol helped me open up.

>>> OR: Drinking was a ritual when I entered university. I didn’t drink out of fear, but for courage, and in those moments, alcohol helped me relax and share my thoughts freely.