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(Homework) Are there funeral practices in your country that you want to change? explain.

김재영/2025-05-29

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As all funeral practices are our traditional culture, I think we should respect them. If possible, I’d like to eliminate one practice receiving wreaths and placing them in front of the funeral hall. It is containing good meaning for condoles to console the rest of the family, but now I think it’s degenerated as kinds of vanity and gloss.

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Jean~~

Are there funeral practices in your country that you want to change? explain.

As all funeral practices are our traditional culture, I think we should respect them.

>>> Since all funeral practices are part of our traditional culture, I believe we should respect them.

If possible, I’d like to eliminate one practice receiving wreaths and placing them in front of the funeral hall.

>>> If possible, I’d like to eliminate the practice of receiving wreaths and placing them in front of the funeral hall.

It is containing good meaning for condoles to console the rest of the family, but now I think it’s degenerated as kinds of vanity and gloss.

>>> While it holds a good meaning in offering condolences to the grieving family, I believe it has now deteriorated into a display of vanity and excess.