Q. In the modern world, using animals for food or animal products, such as clothing and medicines, is no longer necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

While I agree that it is better to make products using animals such as winter padded jacket or blanket, I personally believe that there is technology to make better products without using animals when making products.

REVISED: While I agree that products like padded jackets or blankets made from animals can be effective, I believe we now have the technology to create better products without using animals.

 In this essay, I will explain why I believe this.

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The first reason is making good enough products with alternative materials. 

REVISED: The first reason is that we can now make high-quality products using alternative materials.

Instance of attire, these days, with technological advances, we feel warm enough even if we no longer make it out of animal hair like Goose.

REVISED: For example, in clothing, technological advancements allow us to stay warm without using animal products like goose down.

The second reason is making good dishes with vegetable such as beans and tofu. 

REVISED: The second reason is that we can create delicious dishes using plant-based ingredients such as beans and tofu.

For example, many restaurants have more case of making steaks using beans instead of cattle of pork. 

REVISED: For example, many restaurants now offer steaks made from beans instead of beef or pork.

Additionally, not only does it taste similar, but it is also good for your health.

REVISED: In addition to tasting similar, these alternatives are also healthier.

More detail, according to the results of the study, meat made of beans is said to be more than 40% healthy because it has higher nutrients than other meats.

REVISED: More specifically, studies show that bean-based meat alternatives can be over 40% healthier because they contain more nutrients.

 In the future, I think we will be able to eat delicious food while maintaining a healthy life without having to raise animals anymore.

REVISED: In the future, I believe we will be able to enjoy tasty, nutritious food without needing to raise animals.

Due to these reasons, I believe that I don’t think we need to use animals for our food and clothing anymore.

REVISED: For these reasons, I believe we no longer need to use animals for food or clothing.