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이유민/2025-05-21

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I am going to work in weekdays, so I can take only one or two appointment in a week. I need a full time rest in weekend, Saturday or Sunday. If I don't have anything to do like going to work or preparing test, I might take a lot of appointments with my friends. When I entered the university, I needed to make new friends. So I made appointments every day, and it was really hard to me. Because we were not that close and I was exhausted in akward mood. But nowdays I can be with my friends all day and I can control my energy and stemina.

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Hi, Megan^^
Thank you for sharing.
Well, indeed, rest is also important.
_T. SHAY^^
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I am going to work in weekdays, so I can take only one or two appointment in a week.

>>I work on the weekdays, so I can take only one or two appointments in a week.

I need a full time rest in weekend, Saturday or Sunday.

>>I need full rest on the weekend--Saturday or Sunday.
If I don't have anything to do like going to work or preparing test, I might take a lot of appointments with my friends. >>If I don't have anything to do like going to work or preparing for a test, I may take a lot of appointments with my friends.
When I entered the university, I needed to make new friends.

>>Correct
OR: When I joined the university, I had to make new friends.

So I made appointments every day, and it was really hard to me. Because we were not that close and I was exhausted in akward mood.

>>So I made appointments every day. It was really hard for me because we were not that close. It made me feel exhausted and awkward.

But nowdays I can be with my friends all day and I can control my energy and stemina.

>>But nowadays I can be with my friends all day, and I can control my energy and stamina.