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What is your dream job?

조유리/2025-05-17

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My dream for the future is to travel the world. I want to experience different cultures and enjoy the happiness that comes from new challenges. That's why I have a habit of saving places I want to visit on my phone map whenever I see them on TV or YouTube

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Hello Yu Li!

Thank you for your nice writing! You shared your dream clearly. Just a small tip: try to use “phone’s map” to show it belongs to your phone. Great job—keep practicing and writing more!

My dream for the future is to travel the world.

>>CORRECT!

I want to experience different cultures and enjoy the happiness that comes from new challenges.

>>CORRECT!

That's why I have a habit of saving places I want to visit on my phone map whenever I see them on TV or YouTube.

>>That's why I have a habit of saving places I want to visit on my phone's map whenever I see them on TV or YouTube.