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What are the disadvantages of aging?

임주미/2025-05-16

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Disadvantages of aging is disease. All of people are getting old almost get sick or pain of course including me. Everyone can't avoid from aging so we should accept lt gently.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Grace!
I totally agree! A lot of older people usually tell us to take care of our health while we are still young because sickness will appear as we get older, but most of the time we ignore it. You are right! Aging is inevitable, so the only thing we can do is embrace it.
- T. Caitlyn 
Disadvantages of aging is disease.
>> A disadvantage of aging is disease.
All of people are getting old almost get sick or pain of course including me.
>> All people get old and almost all experience sickness or pain, including me.
Everyone can't avoid from aging so we should accept lt gently.
>> No one can avoid aging, so we should accept it gracefully.
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