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What are the challenges you’ve faced in helping your son purse their deam?

오혜영/2025-05-13

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Hello Elly I wrote my essay as homwork. Please check the attatched picture. I always thanks for your help. See you todays class. ☺️

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Hi Stella,

Thank you for taking the time to answer this question. I really appreciate it.

You are always welcome. I would love to help you in any way I can. :)

In relation to your essay, I think it is really difficult to support your son while worrying about his future.

At the end of the day, you just want the best for him. You are a good mother! :)

- Teacher Elly~

It is too hard for me to support his dream totally.

>> CORRECT

OR >> I find it too difficult to fully support his dream.

Because I also wish he has stable job. But, It might not equal with his dream.

>> Because I also wish that he will have a stable job, but it might not be his dream.

I face this situation now.

>> I am facing this situation now.

He wants to learn soccer. I can support him.

>> CORRECT

OR >> He wants to learn and play soccer, then I can support him on this.

But, as I said before paragraph, I hope his stable life.

>> But, as I said on the previous sentence, I wish him a stable life.

OR >> Like what I have said on the previous sentence, I hope he will have a stable life.

If he just wants more learning it, then It is okay to me.

>> If he wants to learn more about it, then it is okay to me.

OR >> If he wants to learn more about it, that is fine with me.

However, If he belive that he could become a soccer player, then I couldn't support him anymore. Because I have to consider in our future.

>> However, if he believes that he could become a soccer player in the future, then I can't support him anymore because I have to consider his future.

However I know that I might be wrong in this.

>> Anyway, I know that I might be wrong about this.