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2025.05.09 homework!
이노준/2025-05-13
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What invention would you like to invent?
The invention I would like to develop is a device that can display the condition of my body as a percentage, similar to how a smartphone shows its battery level.
It would allow for a simple check to instantly indicate my overall physical condition in percentage.
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Hello Chris,
Great job in your homework!!!
I can see you're trying hard to learn. Your discipline is good, keep it up. Keep applying in your daily life what you learn every day. Knowledge will give you power. Power will give the confidence that you need. You can do it if others can, so can you. Enjoy your day! ^^
T. Jeny
>>correct
The invention I would like to develop is a device that can display the condition of my body as a percentage, similar to how a smartphone shows its battery level.
>>correct
It would allow for a simple check to instantly indicate my overall physical condition in percentage.
It would allow for a simple check to instantly indicate my overall physical condition in percentage.
>>It would allow a simple check to instantly indicate the overall percentage of my physical condition.
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