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Which disaster do you fear most?

이복희/2025-05-07

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I fear flood. When I was work, our area was flood. It rained 750mm only one night. A lot of house disappeared, some people died. A lot of farmland was flooded, electricity shut down. We was lost a lot of things. This rain was not from typhoon, it was local torrential rainfalls. It damaged in our area. Nowadays we had a sudden change of weather. So we have to prepare it before. But I am not sure how to prepare it. We have a lot of natural disaster. So I fear summer season. I want to the earth become comfortable place.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Ms. Eva!
Everybody has certain fears. Have you watched the movie "Crawl"? It is the story of an area where there was a flood, and a crocodile entered someone's residence. It was scary, and when I saw this, I got scared of going closer to the murky area. ^^
Aki~


I fear flood. 
>> I fear floods.

When I was work, our area was flood.
>> When I was at work, our area was flooded.

It rained 750mm only one night.
>>  It rained 750mm only in one night.

A lot of house disappeared, some people died.
>> A lot of houses were submerged under water, and some people died.

A lot of farmland was flooded, electricity shut down.
>>  A lot of farmland was flooded, and electricity was shut down.

We was lost a lot of things.
>> We lost a lot of things.

This rain was not from typhoon, it was local torrential rainfalls.
>>  This rain was not from a typhoon; it was local torrential rain.

It damaged in our area. 
>> It damaged our area.

Nowadays we had a sudden change of weather. So we have to prepare it before.
>>  Nowadays, we have a sudden change of weather. So we have to prepare ahead of time.

But I am not sure how to prepare it.
>> CORRECT!

We have a lot of natural disaster. 
>>  We have a lot of natural disasters. 

So I fear summer season.
>>  So I fear the summer season.

I want to the earth become comfortable place.
>>> I want the Earth to become a comfortable place.

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