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이유민/2025-04-30

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I think the best tourist attraction is artificial beach in Australia. It is very unique because it is not a pool and not a real beach! I saw the beach for the first time and it was really nice. Many people visit the place and enjoy with their familly and friends. I loved the relieved mood in that place. And in my country, I think the best tourist attraction is Jeju island. There are not only many trendy restaurants but also many traditional restaurant. I think they have old and new cultures. So tourist can enjoy all of them. And Jeju island's scenery is very great because they have many beaches and a mountain.

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Hi, Megan^^
Thank you for sharing.
That beach is fascinating.
_T. SHAY^^
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I think the best tourist attraction is artificial beach in Australia.

>>I think the best tourist attraction is the artificial beach in Australia.
It is very unique because it is not a pool and not a real beach!

>>Correct
OR: It is very special because it is neither a pool nor a beach.

I saw the beach for the first time and it was really nice.

>>I saw the beach for the first time, and it was really nice.

OR: I was able to visit it, and it was really awesome.

Many people visit the place and enjoy with their familly and friends.

>>Many people visit the place and enjoy with their family and friends.

OR: Many people visit the place with their family and friends.

I loved the relieved mood in that place.

>>I love that place because I felt relieved after visiting it.
And in my country, I think the best tourist attraction is Jeju island.

>>Correct
OR: In Korea, I think the best tourist attraction is Jeju Island.
There are not only many trendy restaurants but also many traditional restaurant.

>>There are not only many trendy restaurants but also many traditional restaurants.

I think they have old and new cultures.

>>Correct
OR: I think they have a mixture of old and new cultures.

So tourist can enjoy all of them.

>>So, tourists can enjoy all of them.

And Jeju island's scenery is very great because they have many beaches and a mountain.

>>And Jeju Island's scenery is very great because they have many beaches and mountains.