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What are the current national issues that the next president must address? Please provide at least t

김영경/2025-04-28

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Above all, internationally the next President must resolve many issues with America because Korea is one of countries that have been influenced the most by America politically and economically. Recently, political hopefuls woo support or favor from Donald Trump who put many economies into chaos for America’s benefits. Second, domestically the next President should gather separated hearts into one so that all Koreans fixate on organized goals to overcome difficulties we’re facing such as sharp decrease population, excessive housing debts. Third, the next President should present long-term goals to jump into developed country. Or he needs to create a springboard to leap forward by amending constitution of presidency from a single 5-year system to two four-year system. We’ve experienced fully the drawbacks of a single 5-year presidency. I think it’s high time for us to think which is better for better Korea.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Above all, internationally the next President must resolve many issues with America because Korea is one of countries that have been influenced the most by America politically and economically.

>> Above all, on an international scale, the next president must address numerous issues with America, as Korea is one of the countries most significantly influenced by America both politically and economically.

Recently, political hopefuls woo support or favor from Donald Trump who put many economies into chaos for America’s benefits.

>> Recently, political hopefuls seek support or favor from Donald Trump, who has caused chaos in many economies for America’s benefit.

Second, domestically the next President should gather separated hearts into one so that all Koreans fixate on organized goals to overcome difficulties we’re facing such as sharp decrease population, excessive housing debts.

>> Second, domestically, the next president should unite the divided hearts of Koreans, encouraging them to focus on collective goals that will help us overcome challenges such as a significant decline in population and burdensome housing debts.

Third, the next President should present long-term goals to jump into developed country.

>> Third, the next president should outline long-term goals to transform the country into a developed nation.

Or he needs to create a springboard to leap forward by amending constitution of presidency from a single 5-year system to two four-year system.

>> Alternatively, he needs to create a springboard for progress by amending the presidential term from a single 5-year term to two 4-year terms.

We’ve experienced fully the drawbacks of a single 5-year presidency. I think it’s high time for us to think which is better for better Korea.

>> We’ve fully experienced the drawbacks of a single 5-year presidency. I believe it’s high time for us to consider what is better for a greater Korea.