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김우인/2025-04-27

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
In my opinion, one of the most important qualities leaders need to have is tolerance about discomfort. When leading a group as a leader, uncomfortable and unexpected situations consequentially happens, even though the leader has great leadership and works hard. I believe that accepting the anger triggered by these inevitable circumstances and moving on is what leader should do. As leader endures it, the group can go to next step. Also, in every group their are at least one person who doesn't match with one. If a person is just a member, it is unnecessary to cope with the awkward person. On the other hand, if a person is a leader it is essential to embrace all the members without discrimination. At this point leader has to endure the discomfort of engaging with a person who doesn't match.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Ms. WooIn! That's a thoughtful perspective! Your opinion reflects an important, often overlooked aspect of leadership which is the ability to handle discomfort with grace and to keep moving forward despite challenges.
-T. Sonny
In my opinion, one of the most important qualities leaders need to have is tolerance about discomfort. 
>>In my opinion, one of the most important qualities leaders need to have is tolerance for discomfort.
When leading a group as a leader, uncomfortable and unexpected situations consequentially happens, even though the leader has great leadership and works hard. 
>>When leading a group, uncomfortable and unexpected situations will inevitably arise, even if the leader has great leadership skills and works hard.
I believe that accepting the anger triggered by these inevitable circumstances and moving on is what leader should do. 
>>Correct!
As leader endures it, the group can go to next step.
>>As the leader endures, the group can move forward.
Also, in every group their are at least one person who doesn't match with one. 
>>Also, in every group, there is at least one person who doesn't get along with others.
If a person is just a member, it is unnecessary to cope with the awkward person. 
>>If someone is just a member, it may be unnecessary to cope with the awkward person.
On the other hand, if a person is a leader it is essential to embrace all the members without discrimination. 
>>Correct!
At this point leader has to endure the discomfort of engaging with a person who doesn't match.
>>In this case, the leader must endure the discomfort of engaging with someone who doesn’t match.
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