영작교정 첨삭 서비스

현재위치

Home > 영작교정 첨삭 서비스

What are the pros of socializing with other people?

이진태/2025-04-10

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Human can't live alone. That's why ancestor of human made a organization to protect from other species such as animal or another human group. The advantage of socialization is to share group's idea or power.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello! I'm really pleased you took the time to finish the homework. Your insights and ideas were shared excellently—keep up the fantastic work!^^
~~Teacher Ryka^^


Human can't live alone.
>> Humans can't live alone.
OR >> People are not meant to live in isolation.

That's why ancestor of human made a organization to protect from other species such as animal or another human group.
>> That's why our ancestors formed organizations to protect themselves from other species, such as animals or other human groups.

The advantage of socialization is to share group's idea or power.
>> The advantage of socialization is the ability to share ideas and power within the group.
이전글 목록 다음글