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김여운/2025-04-09

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I like geography so, i enterened geographia which is my school club. Researching island is one of my best studies, because i know new thing to research island. For example, when i prepared to Dokdo, i realized that it has many organism and i noticed why Dokdo is Korea island. So, i can persuade when Japaneses claim Dokdo is our island. First Dokdo is the nearest Korea than Japan. Seocnd, when i see the past historical document from Japan that says "Dokdo is Korea island!!!". Lastly, when the past, korean live in Dokdo. So, Geography can notice many information to me!

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Hi, Chloe!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. You really did well! :)
~ T. Camille

I like geography so, I enterened geographia which is my school club.

>> I like geography so, I entered "Geographia", which is my school club.

Researching island is one of my best studies, because I know new thing to research island.

>> Researching islands is one of my best studies, because I learn new things about the islands.

For example, when I prepared to Dokdo, I realized that it has many organism and I noticed why Dokdo is Korea island.

>> For example, when I made a presentation about the Dokdo Island, I realized that it has many organisms and I noticed why Dokdo is Korea's island.
So, I can persuade when Japaneses claim Dokdo is our island.

>> So, I can persuade and argue if the Japanese claims Dokdo as their island.

First Dokdo is the nearest Korea than Japan.

>> First, Dokdo is nearest to Korea than Japan.

Seocnd, when I see the past historical document from Japan that says "Dokdo is Korea island!!!".

>> Second, when I saw the past historical documents from Japan, it says "Dokdo is Korea's island!!!".
Lastly, when the past, korean live in Dokdo.

>> Lastly, in the past, Koreans lived in Dokdo.

So, Geography can notice many information to me!

>> So, Geography can provide many information to me!