HOMEWORK: Who were the most important people in your childhood? Why?
The most important person in my childhood was my mom!
When I was little, I was terrified of being away from her.
I still remember the first day I went to preschool when I was five—
as soon as I couldnt see her, I stood and cried the whole day.
I cried so much that my mom eventually had to come back and pick me up.
I think I must have been a difficult child to raise.
Im really thankful to my mom.
Hello Isabel. What a heartfelt story you have! Your writing beautifully captures the bond between you and your mom, and its easy to feel the emotion in your memory. You expressed everything clearly, with just a couple of minor changes for smoothness. Thank you for sharing such a sweet and meaningful part of your childhood. Your appreciation for your mom truly shines.
~ T. Lia
The most important person in my childhood was my mom!
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When I was little, I was terrified of being away from her.
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I still remember the first day I went to preschool when I was five.
>> I still remember the first day I went to preschool when I was five.
as soon as I couldnt see her, I stood and cried the whole day.
>> As soon as I couldnt see her, I stood there and cried the whole day.
Original: I cried so much that my mom eventually had to come back and pick me up.
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I think I must have been a difficult child to raise.
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Im really thankful to my mom.
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