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Talk about a country where you want to experience living in for a year or two.
박순호/2025-04-09
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Actually, I plan to travel around the world after I retire. I have less than 3 years left until I retire.
The Korean YouTuber I introduced in class is currently staying in Baguio to study English after traveling to several countries for the past three years.
He said he felt his English skills were not enough to communicate freely and make friends with tourists from all over the world.
I want to do the opposite of what he did.
What I want to say is that I will first live in Baguio, Philippines for a year to learn English and then travel around the world.
I know that Baguio's weather is good to live in because it is neither cold nor hot all year round.
In addition, the cost of living is cheaper than in Korea, which is also an advantage.
I think the Philippines is made up of many islands and has a variety of cultures, and there will be many buildings made during the Spanish and American colonies.
So I think the Philippines is a good place to experience living in for about a year.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Mr. Park^^
Thank you for sharing.
It seems like you really like Baguio.
_T. SHAY^^
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Actually, I plan to travel around the world after I retire.
Thank you for sharing.
It seems like you really like Baguio.
_T. SHAY^^
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Actually, I plan to travel around the world after I retire.
>>Correct
OR: Actually, I am considering traveling around the world after my retirement.
I have less than 3 years left until I retire.
OR: Actually, I am considering traveling around the world after my retirement.
I have less than 3 years left until I retire.
>>Correct
OR: I have less than three years remaining until retirement.
The Korean YouTuber I introduced in class is currently staying in Baguio to study English after traveling to several countries for the past three years.
OR: I have less than three years remaining until retirement.
The Korean YouTuber I introduced in class is currently staying in Baguio to study English after traveling to several countries for the past three years.
>>Correct
OR: The Korean YouTuber I told you about in class is currently staying in Baguio to study English after traveling around the world for the past three years.
He said he felt his English skills were not enough to communicate freely and make friends with tourists from all over the world.
OR: The Korean YouTuber I told you about in class is currently staying in Baguio to study English after traveling around the world for the past three years.
He said he felt his English skills were not enough to communicate freely and make friends with tourists from all over the world.
>>Correct
OR: He said he realized the need to improve his English skills to communicate freely and make friends with tourists from all over the world.
I want to do the opposite of what he did.
OR: He said he realized the need to improve his English skills to communicate freely and make friends with tourists from all over the world.
I want to do the opposite of what he did.
>>Correct
OR: I intend to go the other way from what he did.
What I want to say is that I will first live in Baguio, Philippines for a year to learn English and then travel around the world.
OR: I intend to go the other way from what he did.
What I want to say is that I will first live in Baguio, Philippines for a year to learn English and then travel around the world.
>>Correct
OR: In other words, I want to live in Baguio for a year to study English and travel around the world after.
I know that Baguio's weather is good to live in because it is neither cold nor hot all year round.
OR: In other words, I want to live in Baguio for a year to study English and travel around the world after.
I know that Baguio's weather is good to live in because it is neither cold nor hot all year round.
>>I know that Baguio's weather is neither cold nor hot which makes it a good place to live in.
In addition, the cost of living is cheaper than in Korea, which is also an advantage.
In addition, the cost of living is cheaper than in Korea, which is also an advantage.
>>Correct
OR: Furthermore, the cost of living is one of the perks of living in the Philippines.
I think the Philippines is made up of many islands and has a variety of cultures, and there will be many buildings made during the Spanish and American colonies.
OR: Furthermore, the cost of living is one of the perks of living in the Philippines.
I think the Philippines is made up of many islands and has a variety of cultures, and there will be many buildings made during the Spanish and American colonies.
>>I think the Philippines is made up of many islands and has a variety of cultures, with many buildings made during the Spanish and American colonial periods.
So I think the Philippines is a good place to experience living in for about a year.
So I think the Philippines is a good place to experience living in for about a year.
>>Correct
OR: With all those reasons, I think the Philippines is a good place to live in for a year.
OR: With all those reasons, I think the Philippines is a good place to live in for a year.
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