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How can people maintain good health?

여종찬/2025-04-08

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I think there are two main reasons that people can stay healthy. First of all, they can keep their health by working out. All of doctors have said that any exercises could enhance their health, both mentally and physically. Second, diets also helps people to maintain their fitness. Eating healthy food like fruit to the extent and avoiding stimulating food are superb way to preserve their health.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey Chan! Great job! You used cohesive devices well and explained both points clearly. Just be careful with small grammar mistakes. Keep it up!

~T. Jenna

I think there are two main reasons that people can stay healthy.

>> I think there are two main ways that people can stay healthy.

>>I believe there are two key means people can maintain good health.

First of all, they can keep their health by working out.

Correct, or

>>Firstly, engaging in regular exercise is a highly effective way to stay fit.

All of doctors have said that any exercises could enhance their health, both mentally and physically.

>>All doctors have said that any exercise can enhance their health, both mentally and physically

>>Many health professionals agree that physical activity improves both mental and physical well-being.

Second, diets also helps people to maintain their fitness.

>>Second, diet also helps people maintain their fitness.

>>Secondly, maintaining a balanced diet also plays an essential role in staying healthy.

Eating healthy food like fruit to the extent and avoiding stimulating food are superb way to preserve their health.

>>Eating healthy food like fruit in moderation and avoiding stimulating foods are superb ways to preserve their health.

>>Consuming nutritious foods such as fruit in moderation, and avoiding overly processed or spicy items, are excellent ways to protect one’s health.