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How does God’s love shape the way you see yourself and others?

노승철/2025-04-08

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
As I believed in God, I became aware of God's heart. Until I knew God's heart, I pointed out the mistakes of others accurately and gave him advice to move on a better way. I was able to point out others' mistakes accurately, while generously passing over my mistakes that others don’t know. However, knowing the heart of God, I was able to point out my mistakes accurately and become tolerant of others' mistakes. That seems to be how God looks at me and others. God has waited generously for my mistakes, so I could do the same.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi David. Your reflection is deeply heartfelt and meaningful. You’ve done a beautiful job expressing how your faith has shaped your perspective on yourself and others. I can feel your sincerity and growth through your words. With just a few small grammar adjustments, your message becomes even clearer. Keep writing with this honesty and humility. Your heart truly shines through.

~ T. Lia

 As I believed in God, I became aware of God's heart.
>> CORRECT

Until I knew God's heart, I pointed out the mistakes of others accurately and gave him advice to move on a better way.
>> Until I knew God's heart, I pointed out others' mistakes accurately and gave them advice to move in a better direction.

I was able to point out others' mistakes accurately, while generously passing over my mistakes that others don’t know.
>> I could point out others' mistakes accurately while overlooking my own mistakes that others didn’t see.

However, knowing the heart of God, I was able to point out my mistakes accurately and become tolerant of others' mistakes.
>> CORRECT

That seems to be how God looks at me and others.
>> CORRECT

God has waited generously for my mistakes, so I could do the same
>> God has patiently waited through my mistakes, so I can do the same for others.

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