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Do you think it's important for kids to choose early what they want to be when they grow up?

이진태/2025-04-08

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I think that choosing their draem early is good, If they can. Because, If the children already have dream, the actions to approch their dream would be more detailed. This action will help them.
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Hello! I'm really pleased you took the time to finish the homework. Your insights and ideas were shared excellently—keep up the fantastic work!^^
~~Teacher Ryka^^


I think that choosing their draem early is good, If they can.
>> I think choosing their dream early is good—if they can.
OR >> I think it's great if kids can figure out their dream early.

Because, If the children already have dream, the actions to approch their dream would be more detailed.
>> If children already have a dream, the actions they take to reach it will be more specific and focused.

This action will help them.
>> CORRECT
OR >>This will help them in the long run.
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