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What was the best spring season memory you have? Why?

이지윤/2025-04-04

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Well, I think it's a memory related to cherry blossoms. We have a quite big park in our city. The park is spacious, there is a large pond, and it also has a great fountain show. It is also a place where the scenery is very nice. Cherry blossoms bloom beautifully in spring and autumn leaves bloom beautifully. I remember meeting with my best friend in pretty clothes at such a park and enjoying it. It was good to see pretty cherry blossoms because they were originally pretty, and I want to say that it is the best memory because the atmosphere of talking with my best friend happily, eating delicious food, and walking is peaceful and good.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi! 

Thank you for sharing your answer with me. It was nice learning about your most precious memory about spring. 
I sincerely appreciate it. ^^

~ Teacher Gina



Well, I think it's a memory related to cherry blossoms.
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>> Or: Well, I think my favorite memory is related to cherry blossoms.

We have a quite big park in our city.
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>> Or: There’s a large park in our city.

The park is spacious, there is a large pond, and it also has a great fountain show. 
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>> Or: he park is spacious, with a large pond and an amazing fountain show.

It is also a place where the scenery is very nice.
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>> Or: It also has beautiful scenery.
>> Or: The view there is also really nice.

Cherry blossoms bloom beautifully in spring and autumn leaves bloom beautifully.
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>> Or: Cherry blossoms bloom beautifully in spring, and the autumn leaves are just as stunning.

I remember meeting with my best friend in pretty clothes at such a park and enjoying it.
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>> Or: I remember meeting my best friend there, both of us dressed nicely, and really enjoying our time.

It was good to see pretty cherry blossoms because they were originally pretty, and I want to say that it is the best memory because the atmosphere of talking with my best friend happily, eating delicious food, and walking is peaceful and good.
>> CORRECT.
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