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이현아/2025-04-04

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What’s the best memory you have from a family dinner? To be honest, I don't like having dinner with my family. Ever since I was young, I was always scolded during meals and told to lose weight, so mealtimes felt uncomfortable. But if I didn’t eat with them, I’d get in even more trouble, so I forced myself to join. Still, if I had to pick a good memory, it would be when we went on a trip to the sea and had seafood together. I love seafood. I still remember the sashimi and grilled clams we had that day—it makes my mouth water just thinking about it.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi Isabel. Thank you for sharing your thoughts so honestly. I can understand why mealtimes were difficult for you, and I admire the way you expressed those emotions in your writing. Despite the challenges, it’s wonderful that you have at least one cherished memory of dining with your family. Your description of the seafood was vivid and engaging. I could almost taste it! Keep expressing yourself through writing, and remember that your feelings are valid. You did a great job! 

~ T. Lia

To be honest, I don't like having dinner with my family.
>> CORRECT

Ever since I was young, I was always scolded during meals and told to lose weight, so mealtimes felt uncomfortable.
>> CORRECT

But if I didn’t eat with them, I’d get in even more trouble, so I forced myself to join.
>> CORRECT

Still, if I had to pick a good memory, it would be when we went on a trip to the sea and had seafood together.
>> CORRECT

I love seafood.
>> CORRECT

I still remember the sashimi and grilled clams we had that day—it makes my mouth water just thinking about it.
>> I still remember the sashimi and grilled clams we had that day; it makes my mouth water just thinking about them.
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