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Have you considered the weight of the violin when choosing one?

노승철/2025-04-04

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
When choosing violin and bow, I considered the weight. However, the thing I considered the most when choosing a violin was the sound of the violin. And I already decided on the violin I wanted to buy, so I couldn't adjust the weight of the violin. I don't like heavy violins. Fortunately, the weight of this violin is just right for me.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello David. Your writing clearly expresses your thought process in choosing a violin. I made a few small adjustments for clarity and fluency, but overall, your response was well-structured. It’s great that you found a violin with a weight that suits you. Keep up the good work in expressing your thoughts effectively. 

~ T. Lia

When choosing violin and bow, I considered the weight.
>> When choosing a violin and bow, I considered their weight.

However, the thing I considered the most when choosing a violin was the sound of the violin.
>> However, the most important factor for me when choosing a violin was its sound.

And I already decided on the violin I wanted to buy, so I couldn't adjust the weight of the violin.
>> Since I had already decided on the violin I wanted to buy, I couldn't change its weight.

I don't like heavy violins.
>> CORRECT

Fortunately, the weight of this violin is just right for me.
>> CORRECT
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