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What was the most memorable concert you've been to so far? Why?

이지윤/2025-04-02

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I've only been to a concert once. When I was an elementary school student, it was not a specific singer concert, but a concert with several singers and several groups. It was the first concert I saw, and I enjoyed watching it with my mother, so it was memorable. Also, the weather seemed to be quite cold, so it was even more memorable.
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Hi! 

Thank you for sharing your experience through this essay. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina



I've only been to a concert once.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I’ve attended a concert only once.

When I was an elementary school student, it was not a specific singer concert but a concert with several singers and several groups.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: When I was in elementary school, it wasn’t a concert for a specific singer, but a concert that featured several singers and groups.

It was the first concert I saw, and I enjoyed watching it with my mother, so it was memorable. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: It was the first concert I attended, and I really enjoyed watching it with my mother, which made it memorable.

Also, the weather seemed to be quite cold, so it was even more memorable.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: The weather was quite cold, which made the experience even more memorable.
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