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윤정현/2025-03-26

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
During the operation day, I often haven`t had adequate time to eat lunch. Some surgeons said that empty stomach is better focusing on their surgeries, so they don't eat anything until they finish their surgeries. However, in my case, I feel difficult to concentrate on my surgery when I am hungry. So, I used to grab simple snacks in case I skip the meal. The great qualification of simple snacks in this case is that they should be small to eat once and high calories to satisfy my hunger. For these reasons, I like to eat chocolate cookies very much.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Good morning, Dr. Stella!

I am sad to hear that every now and then, you have to grab a chocolate cookie to boost your energy. However, I think you deserve it. We can call it guilty pleasure or reward for your massive work after an operation. Albeit cookies being loaded with sugar, it is easy to munch and enjoy.

Maybe kimbap or other bite-size snacks may not be as fun as a chocolate cookie. ^^

Below, you have average to long sentences. Combination of both can lead to even longer sentences. You can achieve them by using accurate transition words such as conjunctions and prepositions or punctuation marks. Kindly read the suggestions and analyze the tenses of verbs and syntax. You did so well!

See you in class.

-T. Donna~

During the operation day, I often haven`t had adequate time to eat lunch.
>> Correct!

Some surgeons said that empty stomach is better focusing on their surgeries, so they don't eat anything until they finish their surgeries.
>> Some surgeons said that empty stomach is better in focusing on their surgeries, so they don't eat anything until they finish their surgeries.

However, in my case, I feel difficult to concentrate on my surgery when I am hungry.
>> However, in my case, it's difficult to concentrate on my surgery when I am hungry.

So, I used to grab simple snacks in case I skip the meal.
>>  So, I grab simple snacks in case I skip a meal.

The great qualification of simple snacks in this case is that they should be small to eat once and high calories to satisfy my hunger.
>> Correct!
Or: The great qualification of simple snacks in this case is small enough to eat once and high in calorie to satisfy my hunger.

For these reasons, I like to eat chocolate cookies very much.
>> Correct!
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