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power of gambling

권경희/2025-03-25

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It is very hard to eradicate gambling centers because that is covert and systematic . Furthermore they are connected politics and economics like yakuza of Japan.l I think that even we make law about limitation and prohibition of online gambling, could not decrease gambling addiction. When human does not have morality, always the evil and temptation will win.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Good afternoon, Ms. Lily!
Gambling can become a serious problem for people engaged with it. When it turns into an addiction, it can lead to financial troubles, emotional stress, and damage to relationships. The risks of gambling addiction are real, and that’s why responsible gambling practices and awareness are so important.  For most people, gambling in moderation as a form of entertainment is fine, but it’s crucial to set limits and recognize when it’s becoming harmful.
Aki~

It is very hard to eradicate gambling centers because that is covert and systematic.
>>> CORRECT!

Furthermore they are connected politics and economics like yakuza of Japan.
>>> Furthermore they are connected to politics and economics like the yakuza of Japan.

I think that even we make law about limitation and prohibition of online gambling, could not decrease gambling addiction.
>>> I think that even if we make laws about the limitation and prohibition of online gambling, could not decrease gambling addiction.

When human does not have morality, always the evil and temptation will win.
>>> When humans do not have morality, always evil and temptation will win.
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