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One of the biggest challenges we face today is making a harmony between work and life. This stems from long working time and job insecurity. However, I firmly believe that this situation can be addressed by abundant of job opportunity and policy aid. Having long working time has brought various drawbacks even though it can create vast yields. Additionally, job insecurity makes people work harder. Therefore, Governments have important role to regulate between employers and employees. Firstly, city agencies should provide high quality jobs for their citizens. Second, they need to support companies or workers by aiding funds like tax reduction for companies and support fund for workers.
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One of the biggest challenges we face today is making a harmony between work and life.
>> One of the biggest challenges we face today is achieving harmony between work and life.
This stems from long working time and job insecurity.
>> This stems from long working hours and job insecurity.
However, I firmly believe that this situation can be addressed by abundant of job opportunity and policy aid.
>> However, I firmly believe that this situation can be addressed through abundant job opportunities and policy aid.
Having long working time has brought various drawbacks even though it can create vast yields.
>> Having long working hours has brought various drawbacks, even though it can lead to high productivity.
Additionally, job insecurity makes people work harder.
>> Correct
Therefore, Governments have important role to regulate between employers and employees.
>> Therefore, governments have an important role in regulating the relationship between employers and employees.
Firstly, city agencies should provide high quality jobs for their citizens.
>> Firstly, city agencies should provide high-quality jobs for their citizens.
Second, they need to support companies or workers by aiding funds like tax reduction for companies and support fund for workers.
>> Secondly, they need to support companies and workers by providing financial aid, such as tax reductions for companies and support funds for workers.