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Homwork☺️

오혜영/2025-03-13

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Hello Jewel It’s spring wind, today The weather is perpect to go picnic. But I’m working at home. I attatched homework. Have a nice day. ☺️
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Stella! Your son is genuinely affectionate and kind. You must be very happy to have him as your son. ^^ Thank you for sharing this sweet story. Have a great day!
~T. Jewel 
When I cought the comment I usually wrote the text on my account like instagram. 
>>When I caught the comment, I usually wrote about it on my Instagram account.
So, I remembered with checking my memories in the SNS. 
>>So, I remembered by checking my memories on SNS
One thing, When I folded ours laundary, my son told me that I couldn't wait for doing it only mom. 
>>One time, when I was folding our laundry, my son told me that he couldn't just wait while I did it alone.
And he added his hands. 
>>And he lent me a hand.
It was impressed how he could say and think like that. 
>> was impressed by how he could say and think like that.
My husband never told me like that.
>>My husband never said that to me.
Neverthless, I was surprise at the fact that he could touch my mind.
>>Nevertheless, I was surprised that he could touch my heart.
 Another thing, It happened last year. 
>>Another thing happened last year.
He made some cookies at school and brougt it back home to give me them. 
>>He made some cookies at school and brought them back home to give to me.
He told me that he wanted to give me the cookie including most expensive fancy. 
>>He told me that he wanted to give me the cookie that included the most expensive and fancy ingredients.
The decoration looked like strawberry what I like fruite. 
>>The decoration looked like a strawberry, which is my favorite fruit.
So I was moved my mind.
>>I was so moved.
My husband didn't told like that ever before. 
>>My husband had never said anything like that before.
But my son and I like him, because he is kind, eventhogh he can't express his emotions by right way. 
>>But my son and I like him because he is kind, even though he can't express his emotions in the right way.
We can feel his love.
>>CORRECT
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