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김우인/2025-03-12

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Most of my friends all in similar age with me. I think it's because I can only see my peers in my environment now and similar ages have similar interests. Sometimes age doesn't matters to become a friend especially when they have same concerns to share. However, in some cases it matters because just being in a similar age consequentially brings lots of things that are common. It also gives internal stability in the beginning of building a relationship. Having more things to share and comfort let the conversation to be continued. And it gives each other an impression to expect next meeting, which leads to becoming a friend when meetings persist. Also most of the people are more used to dealing with there peers. So that people tend to easily try becoming a friend with people in similar age compare to a person with the same condition but big age difference. Therefore I think it's not impossible to become a friend with people with big age difference but it's much harder than with peers.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Ms. WooIn! I like how you acknowledged that age doesn’t always matter when it comes to forming friendships. If two people share similar concerns or values, those deeper connections can transcend age. It might take a bit longer to develop, but meaningful friendships can absolutely form across age differences.
-T. Sonny
Most of my friends all in similar age with me. 
>>Most of my friends are around the same age as me.
I think it's because I can only see my peers in my environment now and similar ages have similar interests. 
>>I think this is because I mostly interact with people in my age group, and people of similar ages often share similar interests.
Sometimes age doesn't matters to become a friend especially when they have same concerns to share. 
>>Sometimes, age doesn't matter when forming friendships, especially when you share similar concerns.
However, in some cases it matters because just being in a similar age consequentially brings lots of things that are common. 
>>However, in some cases, age does matter because being of a similar age often brings many commonalities.
It also gives internal stability in the beginning of building a relationship. 
>>It also provides a sense of internal stability at the beginning of building a relationship.
Having more things to share and comfort let the conversation to be continued. 
>>Having more shared experiences and comfort allows conversations to continue more naturally.
And it gives each other an impression to expect next meeting, which leads to becoming a friend when meetings persist.
>>And it gives each person the impression that they can look forward to the next meeting, which leads to a friendship as these meetings persist.
Also most of the people are more used to dealing with there peers. 
>>Additionally, most people are more accustomed to interacting with their peers.
So that people tend to easily try becoming a friend with people in similar age compare to a person with the same condition but big age difference.
>>As a result, people are more likely to try to become friends with others of a similar age, compared to someone with a significant age difference.
Therefore I think it's not impossible to become a friend with people with big age difference but it's much harder than with peers.
>>Therefore, I think it’s not impossible to become friends with someone of a large age difference, but it’s definitely harder than forming friendships with peers.


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