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김승민/2025-03-11
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I agree to some extent with this statement.
Through various idea, finally we live in capitalism which money is the most important eliments.
Therefore, bigger salary is much enough to attract management talent.
However, Fund is not only thing the matter.
People usually consider their personalities, potential and self-realization.
It means that the motivation is significant resources for being directors of campanies.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi Seung Min!
I can see your improvement every day.
I hope you keep working hard.
Good job!^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I agree to some extent with this statement.
>> Correct
Through various idea, finally we live in capitalism which money is the most important eliments.
Through various idea, finally we live in capitalism which money is the most important eliments.
>> Through various ideas, we have finally come to live in a capitalist system where money is the most important element.
Therefore, bigger salary is much enough to attract management talent.
Therefore, bigger salary is much enough to attract management talent.
>> Therefore, a bigger salary is often enough to attract management talent.
However, Fund is not only thing the matter.
However, Fund is not only thing the matter.
>> However, funds are not the only thing that matters.
People usually consider their personalities, potential and self-realization.
People usually consider their personalities, potential and self-realization.
>> Correct
It means that the motivation is significant resources for being directors of campanies.
It means that the motivation is significant resources for being directors of campanies.
>> This means that motivation is a significant resource for becoming directors of companies.
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