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Do you prefer relaxing or being active on weekends?

노승철/2025-03-11

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
We could not apply the concept of the relaxing equally to everyone. For someone whose job requires a lot of work mentally, doing active work on weekends can be a relaxing. On the contrary, for those who have to work physically, physical relaxing can be a real relaxing. I don't think relaxing is doing nothing and staying still. I don't want to do just one or the other on the weekend. I think real relaxing should be a harmonious activity and rest between the body and the mind.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi David! Your writing presents a thoughtful perspective on relaxation. You did a great job explaining how different people relax in various ways. Your conclusion about balance between activity and rest is especially well expressed. Keep up the great work!

~ T. Lia 

We could not apply the concept of the relaxing equally to everyone.
>> We cannot apply the concept of relaxation equally to everyone.

For someone whose job requires a lot of work mentally, doing active work on weekends can be a relaxing.
>> For someone whose job is mentally demanding, doing active work on weekends can be a form of relaxation.

On the contrary, for those who have to work physically, physical relaxing can be a real relaxing.
>> On the contrary, for those who do physical labor, physical rest can be true relaxation.

I don't think relaxing is doing nothing and staying still.
>> I don’t think relaxation means doing nothing and staying still.

I don't want to do just one or the other on the weekend.
>> I don’t want to do just one or the other on weekends.

I think real relaxing should be a harmonious activity and rest between the body and the mind.
>> I think true relaxation should be a harmonious balance of activity and rest for both the body and the mind.
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