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김예솔/2025-03-07

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Why do people care about what others think of them? I like this title! first of all, I think I don't know the exact answer! But in my case, sometimes the care comes from low confidence, sometimes it comes from just a curiosity. I don't think the second case is bad. But in the first case, I think it isn't good for myself. so anyway, alway the best is moderate things.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Yesol!

Great start! Your idea is clear, and I like how you shared your personal perspective. Work on sentence structure and word choice for better flow.

~ Trixia

CONTENT:

I like this title!

- CORRECT.

first of all, I think I don't know the exact answer!

- First of all, I don’t think I know the exact answer!

But in my case, sometimes the care comes from low confidence, sometimes it comes from just a curiosity.

- However, in my case, sometimes caring comes from low confidence, and sometimes it comes from simple curiosity.

I don't think the second case is bad. But in the first case, I think it isn't good for myself.

- I don’t think the second case is bad, but the first case isn’t good for me.

so anyway, alway the best is moderate things.

- So anyway, balance is always the best.