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Some friends you met on a trip want you to visit their country. You don't know much about the count

김승민/2025-03-06

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I think I will go their country, even if there is risk involved. It can be new experience and I love to know the world I never met before. Regardless of how much I know, I can aware their culture step by step. I also care of danger, I need to be safe when I visit country I go first. However, My appetite of meeting new world is more bigger than being safe.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Seung Min!

I love the ideas you have.

You know how to prioritize the reasons that you would include in your answer.

We just need to focus on vocabulary and sentence construction now.^^

~~ Teacher Sharon

I think I will go their country, even if there is risk involved.

>> I think I will go to their country, even if there is risk involved.
It can be new experience and I love to know the world I never met before.

>> It can be a new experience and I love to learn about a world that I've never known.
Regardless of how much I know, I can aware their culture step by step.

>> Regardless of how much I know, I can learn about their culture step by step.
I also care of danger, I need to be safe when I visit country I go first.

>> I also worry about danger, so I need to be safe when I visit a country for the first time.
However, My appetite of meeting new world is more bigger than being safe.

>> However, my desire to explore new cultures is greater than my concern for safety.