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Some companies use a flexible time schedule and employees can work hours that suit their lifestyles.

송정훈/2025-03-01

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Thank you asking me this nice question! Have nice weekends!
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Hi, Diego!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. You really did well! :)
~ T. Camille

I highly agree with the company’s decision that employees can work hours that suit their lifestyles.
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However, I believe there are some conditions that must be followed.
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I’ve been working in a manufacturing company that produces various kinds of semiconductor products. 
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The typical feature of a manufacturing industry is ‘you never work alone’. 
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There are processes that are necessary to make a product. 
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It is connected organically. 
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It is important to follow the timeline so that semi-finished products keep on track.
>> It is important to follow the timeline so that semi-finished products would be kept on track.
As I mentioned, if employees want to work hours that suit their lifestyles, the company’s work should not be connected strongly, rather be kind of task easily separated. 
>> As I mentioned, if employees want to work hours that suit their lifestyles, the company’s work should not be connected strongly, rather it should be a kind of task that's easily separated. 
So, one’s absence does not interfere with whole procedures.
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I believe this is the reason why only a specific industry can provide employees with a kind of benefit. Such as financial services, programming industries etc.
>> I believe this is the reason why only a specific industry can provide employees with a kind of benefit such as financial services, programming industries, etc.
The benefits of employees choosing their working hours are based on respecting personal differences. 
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So, I believe it will increase personal productivity.
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Thank you asking me this nice question!
Have nice weekends!

[No worries! It's actually fun reading your answers that are actually on point. :) Thank you for sharing your thoughts! :) ~ T. Camille]
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