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김우인/2025-02-26

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I'm interested in playing sports these days. In my school days, especially in high school I rarely had a chance to try something else rather than activities that help to enter college. So, even though I liked playing sports, the only time I could play and learn how to play certain sports was in school PE class, which is only about 2~3 times a week. Therefore, it was like a dream for me to join a sports club and play sports together. As I entered the college I immediately joined school woman basketball club and participated enthusiastically. I participated hard in periodical practices and I also took part in the real game with other teams. I enjoyed being in the club but I also find out that I want to try various events of sports. I searched for different kinds of sports too and these days I regularly go out for run or learn futsal in a new club. I hope my interest for sports lasts as long as it can, because they are good for health which maintains my everyday life.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Ms. Woo In! It sounds like sports have become an important part of your life, not only for fitness but also for personal growth and fun. I’m sure you’re finding that it’s a great stress reliever too, which is always a bonus!
-T. Sonny
I'm interested in playing sports these days.
>>Correct!
In my school days, especially in high school I rarely had a chance to try something else rather than activities that help to enter college. 
>>Back in my school days, especially in high school, I rarely had a chance to try anything other than activities that would help me get into college.
So, even though I liked playing sports, the only time I could play and learn how to play certain sports was in school PE class, which is only about 2~3 times a week. 
>>Although I liked playing sports, the only time I could play and learn how to play certain sports was during PE class, which only occurred about two or three times a week.
Therefore, it was like a dream for me to join a sports club and play sports together.
>>Therefore, it felt like a dream for me to join a sports club and play sports with others.

As I entered the college I immediately joined school woman basketball club and participated enthusiastically.
>>When I entered college, I immediately joined the women’s basketball club and participated enthusiastically.
I participated hard in periodical practices and I also took part in the real game with other teams. 
>>I worked hard during regular practices and also took part in real games against other teams.

I enjoyed being in the club but I also find out that I want to try various events of sports. 
>>I enjoyed being in the club, but I also realized that I wanted to try various types of sports.

I searched for different kinds of sports too and these days I regularly go out for run or learn futsal in a new club.
>>I’ve explored different kinds of sports, and these days I regularly go for runs or learn futsal at a new club.

I hope my interest for sports lasts as long as it can, because they are good for health which maintains my everyday life.
>>I hope my interest in sports lasts as long as possible, as they are good for my health and help maintain my everyday life.
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